Thursday, August 27, 2015
Digital Life (rough draft)
Social media is great! Social media can help us connect better with friends and family, it
can allow us to see what kind of things people around the world are doing, it can even give us
warnings a head of time of upcoming events. But social media can also be a very dark and scary
place even I don't want to get on it sometimes. Social media makes teens insecure about themselves
about things like wanting to fit in, their looks/body, and in some cases it makes them feel unwanted.
And this happens to everyone today in some type of way.
Although social media can make teens insecure it can also help teens face those insecurities. "When a person is insecure in their relationship and feeling down about their partner, they take to
Facebook for some kind of validation." This is how some people use social media to make them feel better about themselves they use it as a outlet to let people know whats going on in their lives at that moment. But this can also be a bad thing for those people that do it too much "We all know at least one person who turns to social media to constantly do one thing: complain about EVERYTHING imaginable. Whether it’s about an ex or school or just life in general, these people don’t hesitate to make a Facebook status or tweet about it… like maybe five times a day." This is a bad thing because they feel more comfortable writing about their feelings in the public rather tan face to a real person where if its in the public there is more of a chance that they will get judged and feel even more about themselves after seeing those comments.
A lot of teenagers love clothes and love to get new ones, it makes them feel better about themselves, it makes them feel more wanted it, makes them feel special and pretty. That's the reason behind why girls wear make up. "Girls use clothes, accessories, and fashion to define themselves, make statements about their choice of peer group, and to establish their psychological identities." this shows one way that teens feel better about themselves or make them feel better about themselves. its also one of the things that teens are the most insecure about. "Fifty-six percent of women revealed that they were dissatisfied with their overall appearance, and an astounding 89% of women wanted to lose weight." This goes to show that a large chunk of out teenage population is insecure about their body.
In some cases teenagers feel as if they are unwanted, and feel like they are invisible to everyone else. This is probably the worst that it can get. "i am at the point that i hate myself and anybody else and I feel like theres no hope and i thought that you might be able to give me some advise since you are good at stuff like that. my mom is always screeming at me and her and my dad don’t love me and i don’t know why cause i try to do everything i can and i’m not a bad kid but they always tell me i am in fact my mom today sayd that i am one of gods biggest mistakes cause i slept threw my alarm and missed my bus. my dad doesnt ever hit me but he is always calling me an idiot or a retard or stuff like that. anyway at school i don’t really have very many friends cause i’m to shy i guess. i don’t know what to do cause i am just wanting to give up even trying anymore cause why should i? have you ever felt like nobody cares if you just disappear cause i really feel that way even with my parents.” this is what happened to one of the teenagers that feels unwanted and as you can see it is a very dark and scary state to be in and this is why I also think that this is the worse case of insecurities because no one especially teens should feel this way about themselves. They should not hate themselves.
So as you can see social media can make teens very insecure, and these are just some of the things that they get insecure about (Looks/body, feeling unwanted, wanting to fit in) So with social media being a big part of todays society it has increased the amount of insecurities and if it continues to grow at this rate it will get out of hand and it will maybe to late to stop. And a way that we can stop it is by simply giving support at and encouragement at a young age.
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Hi! Overall your essay was okay but there are a few things you need to fix.
ReplyDeleteI understand your purpose of the essay but i would change how you use your evidence. It is set in a story form, and you don't explain who the victim is.
Another thing would be your context, you are not clear as it is hard to understand what you are leading up too.
Overall, good essay.
YOU NEED TO MAKE SURE THAT ALL YOUR DISCUSSION IS IN SUPPORT OF YOUR ACTUAL TOPIC AND SUBTOPIC. RIGHT NOW SOME OF YOUR DISCUSSION IS TAKEN OUT OF CONTEXT AND JUST EXPLAINED BY ITSELF. FOR EXAMPLE, ONE PARAGRAPH YOU TALK ABOUT BUYING CLOTHES AND CARING ABOUT LOOKS BUT HAS NO CONNECTION TO SOCIAL MEDIA AND TEEN INSECURITY. YOUR LAST BODY PARAGRAPH IS ENTIRELY AN EXAMPLE OF SOMEONE ELSES LIFE BUT THERE IS NO EXPLANATION OF IT AND THE EXAMPLE ITSELF IS WEAK. REMEMBER, YOU WANT EVIDENCE TO BE FACTS, STATS, OR RESEARCH DONE TO HELP PROVE YOUR POINT.
ReplyDeleteREMEMBER, YOUR PURPOSE OF THIS ESSAY IS TO PROVE HOW SOCIAL MEDIA IMAGE INFLUENCE OR AFFECTS INSECURITIES IN A NEGATIVE WAY. YOU NEED TO DISCUSS THAT AND PROVE IT TO BE TRUE. AS(1-)